谁能帮我修改一下我写的英语作文啊 很急的！！ 谁能帮我修改一下英语作文？？（高手请进）急！！
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i am a high school student and have studied in the young school for almost two years which set up only for three years.when i first entered the school,i had made five friends ,moreover,all of them lived in the same dormitory with me.it made me happy that i had never made so many friends,i sensed i was the happiest person in the world at that time.
three years ago,i failed the exam,entrance for senior-level middle school.only 539 grades in such important examination,thus i couldn't attend the key high school.however,my parents always comforted me for my failure,mom told;i think u are great!u are fond of painting ,dream of entering in a great arts college,they cost your much time so u have no enough time to review.i am happy with your achivement now.just take it easy.don't worry about it.;
afterwards,i came here,an art high school.now,my new life is advancing me...
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2idea是想法；主意；概念，构想，意念
ideas 最好换成suggestions建议
3、 help To do note to learn and learn Chinese first class 你想表达什么？我不明白，你可以说 may help you learn Chinese better.
4、read magazines 不能用look at
5、to learn more words and the meaning of it好啰嗦，直接写 to learn more words 就可以了
6、possibly also with Chinese people to talk to这句话你是想表达尽可能多地与中国人交谈吗？那就说talk with Chinese people as much as possible.
7、 and let him guide you, and do not understand 连词过多，前面一个and去掉
8、do not understand and asked, can write and ask me是什么意思？不要理解和问，可以写和问我……改一下吧……if you do not understand ,you can write and ask me, I will help you.如果你不理解，你可以写信来问我，我会帮助你的。
9.Do as I say the words 去掉 the words
10、you Chinese should be no problem你的中文应该没有问题。你的中文应该是your Chinese啊
我的评价：这篇作文有点中式英文CHINGLISH,就是看起来是凑词凑起来的，有点啰嗦的感觉。
有些小细节要仔细一点~~~~~~
Dear Linda,
I'm very glad that you'll come to China to watch the Oiympic Games.I know it isn't easy to learn a foreign language ,but I have some ideas that may help
you learn and learn Chinese first class, open your mouth to speak more and practice more, listen more about the Chinese language program and follow it, it seems to me that this will be of great help. You can also look at some Chinese magazines to learn more words and the meaning of it, possibly also with Chinese people to make a dialogue, and let them guide you, if you did not understand it and just ask them,absouletly you can write it and ask me. Your chinese will be better and better.
Best wishes and looking forward to meeting you in China.
第二行“sone”改为“some",help后加you
第三行改为First do note carefully in the class,open you mouth and practice more as ofen
第六行“and do not understand and asked,can write and ask me.”改为if you don't understand youcan write and ask me
第七行Do as I say the words, you Chinese should be no problem改为Do what I say ,you will have no problem in Chinese
do note改为make note look at改为 read you chinese改为your chinese 大哥，确实写的不咋的啦，
Dear Linda,
I'm very glad that you'll come to China to watch the Oiympic Games.I know it isn't easy to learn a foreign language ,but I have some ideas that may help.
To learn Chinese , opening your mouth to speak ， making practice more and listening to the Chinese programes are the very important way to make progress. And follow what the people say on the TV.It can improve you pronunciation.You can also watch some Chinese magazines to learn more words, even then talk with Chinese people .And regard him as a guide for you, If you do not understand or have some trouble, you can write to me. Just do as what I have said ,you will realize that Chinese is a funny language and easy to learn it.
Best wishes and looking forward to meeting you in China.
Yours,
Li Hua
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