麻烦大家帮忙改下作文啊，谢谢，主要看看语法错误，拼写错误啥的，谢谢！！ 麻烦大家帮忙改下作文啊，谢谢，主要看看语法错误，拼写错误啥的...
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Notes:
1. (): add
2. []: delete
3. {}: unclear, questionable
4. Do not begin a sentence with 'and' in formal writing.
The writing is already excellent. My suggestions are just for you information. Please use your own judgement.
Academic writing should include five parts. They are Introduction, literature Review, Methodology, Results and Conclusions.
There are four parts in the introduction. (The f)irst is the need for the study. You should compare the previous studies and current studies and find out the differences and progresses. You should write two things. What has been done and what has not been done? [And m]Make sure your study will address the second. Second part is the purpose of the study. Purpose of study includes the purpose of your research or explanation of your research on which topic you are going to research as well as the motives of the research. The format should be \u201cThis study investigates\u2026\u201d (The t)hird part is Research Questions and Hypotheses. The questions should be general [questions] and the hypotheses should be specific. (For example, RQ: Is there any significant difference in students\u2019 academic achievement between students of class A and those belonging to class B? HP: It is hypothesized that there exists no significant difference in students\u2019 academic achievement between student(s) of class A and class B.) The last part is the significance of the study. Significance of the study in thesis is the part where you tell how your study would be beneficial to specific people or parts of the society and how they could use it.
In the literature review you should write two things. What has been achieved and who has done what? Literature review includes three parts. First is Historical Background. You should write some special studies or (you can) omit it. Second is the Theoretical Background. You should present the theoretical frame(work) in your study. Third is the Related Research. You should write current studies of the same area here.
Part three is the Methodology {or the purpose of the study}/?/. In the Research Design part, you should describe your research. In the instrument part, you should write the measurements and scales etc(.) that you applied in your study. Treatment is what you have done to the sample. [And n]Next are Data Collection Procedures and Data Analysis Procedures. The last is the Limitations. You should write the shortcomings of your study.
[Next] (The third) part is the Results. In this part, you should answer the research questions.
Last part is Conclusions. Implications for Practice [are](is) the part where you tell how your study would be beneficial to specific people or parts of the society and how they could use it. And in Recommendations for Future Research, you should put forward some advice to improve the study. And the recommendations should (be) relevant to the Limitations
改：我是在阿拉木图市出生的。
（建议：阿拉木图是个城市，直接说阿拉木图市就好）
2、我已经住在北京四年多。
改：我已经住在北京四年多了。
（建议：这样该比较顺）
3、我的专业就是翻译。
改：我的专业是翻译。
4、我本来自己不愿意出国留学，可是我爸爸逼我去。我也没办法只好听他的。
改：我自己本来不愿意出国留学，但是爸爸逼我来，没办法，我只好听他的。
（建议：不用刻意强调“我爸爸”，一句完整的话句号结尾，你所说的是一句话，却用了两个句号）
5、我刚来到中国时对一切感觉很陌生，那就是我第一次出国，第一次离开我父母。
改：我刚来到中国时，对一切感觉很陌生，因为这是我第一次出国，也是第一次离开我的父母。（建议：句子适当停顿，这句话有因果关系，所以用“因为”来连接句子，第一次出国和第一次离开父母并列，用“也”连接）
6、经常会想我家。想着想着就会流眼泪。
改：我经常会想家，想着想着就会流眼泪。
（建议：一句话必须有主语，注意标点）
7、记得，有一天她给我打电话说：“你去哪个国家留学都会遇到一些困难，可是每个人都会遇到困难。不管遇到什么困难，我们都要积极应对，永远对生活充满希望。不要难过，不要悲伤，真主与我们同在。随着我家人的和朋友们的帮助我慢慢的习惯了这里的生活。
改：记得有一天，妈妈给我打电话说：“你去哪个国家留学都会遇到一些困难，每个人的一生都会遇到困难。不管遇到什么样的困难，我们都要积极应对，永远对生活充满希望。不要难过，不要悲伤，真主与我们同在。“随着家人和朋友们的帮助，我慢慢的习惯了这里的生活。
（建议：“她”在前文没有提过，要写妈妈；“可是”有转折语气，这里不用；人说的话用引号括起来；在家人、朋友、爸爸、妈妈前不用刻意加上我）
8、我给你们介绍一下我的家庭。
改：下面，我给你们介绍一下我的家庭。
（建议：注意连词使用）
9、我妈妈叫丽莎。
（建议：这一段不用另起，接上一段就好。）
10、别人都说我跟她长得很像，一样的脸型，还有一样的卷发，种种的类似。
改：别人都说我跟她长得很像，一样的脸型，还有一样的卷发。
（建议：“种种的类似”删掉）
11、从我母亲的手上你能看出来，我母亲的勤劳，她没事干的时候也不会歇着，总要找点儿什么家务活儿来干，家务活儿全扛在了母亲的身上，可她从来没有半句怨言。她这让我佩服!
改：从母亲的手上你能看出母亲的勤劳，她很少歇着，就算没事干的时候，她也总要找点儿家务活来干，家里的家务活儿都是母亲做的，从未有过半句怨言。我很佩服她！
12、我爸爸是企业主。
改：我爸爸是个企业主。
13、虽然他不想别的家长那样富有，但他为我们付出的绝对不比别人的父母差，甚至比他们还好。
改：虽然他不像别的家长那样富有，但他为我们付出的绝不比别人差，甚至比他们付出的更多。
14、他今年20岁。
改：她今年20岁。
15、她是个性格温柔的人，不会发脾气。
改：她是个温柔的人，很少发脾气。
（建议：“温柔”就是描写性格的，不用再加性格；人都会发脾气，因为温柔，所以应该是很少发脾气）
16、我弟弟今年9岁。他也跟我父母在一起生活。
改：我弟弟叫——，他今年9岁，跟我的父母生活在一起。
17、那就是跳舞，摄影，旅行。
改：比如跳舞，摄影，旅行。
18、不之情的人还会以为我是神精病。
改：不知情的人还以为我是神经病。
希望我的回答 你能满意。
可见，我爱看书已达到了如痴如狂、爱不释手的程度了。
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