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Children's crimes is becoming a serious social problem. Almost every school has different
degree of school violence. Should their parents have no responsibility for the children's
crimes? Of course not. Parents must educate their children except feeding them.
There are several reasons why parents are responsible for children's crimes.First, they don't give their children a lesson
about law. It would be their whole life shame and dirty pot if they crime. Secondly, there
are no efficient way of communication (\u7f3a\u4e4f\u6709\u6548\u7684\u6c9f\u901a\uff0c\u597d\u50cf\u592a\u4e2d\u56fd\u82f1\u8bed\u4e86\uff0c\u4e0d\u5730\u9053) Most of the time youngsters must
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their children.
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When we were arriving home,people began to laugh at my brother that he bared his upper in the rain and sang happily and loudly.Maybe no one noticed that the warm cloth i was wearing was too big for me but it kept me warm along all the way home after i told my brother that i was cery cold...
That was my brother,my brother forever...
这是根据我以前的亲身经历改编的 一直都想写下来，直到今天 才认真的写了下来。稍微有点长，你可以再加工一下，希望可以帮到你。
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About 10 years ago, on a beautiful morning full of bright sunlight, I went fishing with my eldder brother.I was so naughty and careless that i slided into the river all of a sudden and luckily was that the water was not very deep and i came out easily,but my cloth was all wet.My brother helped take off my wet shirt and put it under the big sun.However, misfortunes never come singly,suddenly,The rain dropped cats and dogs.We have to go back immediately because there was no place for us to get rid of the rain around the river.He rod the bike so fast that the wind and the pelting rain and my wet cloth gave me a frozing kiss...
When we were arriving home,people began to laugh at my brother that he bared his upper in the rain and sang happily and loudly.Maybe no one noticed that the warm cloth i was wearing was too big for me but it kept me warm along all the way home after i told my brother that i was cery cold...
That was my brother,my brother forever...
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It was a normal day, good sunshine, little bit chill. I went back home, like usual, 18 steps of stairs, 5 steps to the door step, got the keys in my left pocket, open the door. My life changed at the moment that i opened the door. My dad was staring at me, not looking at me, staring, in a weird way, so does my mom, and my two sisters. Without a word, I am scared, it happened right in front of me, my dad pulled out a shot gun and blew my mom's head off. Surprisingly, all my sister did not do a damn thing, they just kept staring at me. I start to scream, really loud. I lost my voice after all my sister got shot too. Then it was my dad himself, he shot himself right in the temple. It was only 2 minutes and i lost all my family. They never said a word, they never did anything except staring at me, weirdly. 3 weeks later, i knew that they were all on drugs. I wanted to cry, but I just cannot forget that look they gave me. It will haunt me through the rest of my life.
Than the sorrow sader story
Together the Kai Yi of broadcasting station producer of the work with write words person the Luo Lin is all life experience wretch, 1 since the childhood was loosed a film play by the parents shine on leave, another because of transportation accident but pain lost parents.Two persons of fellow sufferers understand each other walk at see the other party as own family, friend and close relatives together and all, with this made up a life in of empty lack, each other loves each other, each other trust, slowly put the regret at part, living get Chien is simple list but also be full of a happiness.But no one knows forever next will have what sudden circumstance, the life becomes because of being full of variable to anticipate, an unexpected disease broke them originally simple but happy life, this disease announces life of Kai Yi more than 200 days' time that leaves an end, arose one ripple in the heart of Kai Yi at this time, Kai Yi this just discovers oneself is thus love deeply Luo Lin, he don't can leave like this.He walked Luo Lin meeting a person is here in the world, completely helpless.Hence, he concealed his own condition and secretly did in the meantime decision, that is to use time that he leaves to look for 1 for the Luo Lin can look after Luo Lin for him the man of one a life time is from cradle to the grave.
A cleverness, reasonable but again doctor Zhu Huan of gentle and soft consideration appeared in good time, in the eyes of Kai Yi, he is probably to bring the Luo Lin life happiness most .In the meantime, more strangely fits of BE, a day that floats snow, Zhu Huan's fortune upon Luo Lin has already fallen in love with her at the first sight, the all these makes the Kai Yi made a firm decision to choose he to act for he to complete the task that he cans not complete.
Hence, with meticulous care design in the Kai Yi under, the Luo Lin and Zhu Huan produced more and more deep feelings in numerous meeting of times, everythings all cared to anticipate in go under the development, and looking at lover at under own skill arrangement the alignment is another person and also brought Kai Yi a huge sorrow, the Kai Yi only silently concealed it.Finally, the Kai Yi takes to deeply reluctant to part with and the wish of earnestness chose wedding dress for Luo Lin in person, the one step one step leads long she heads for a church and heads for bridegroom, Zhu Huan, .
Probably because there is reflecting to give of happiness, the sorrow seems to is all the more sad.But, everything all for the sake of happiness, everything all again because of happiness refuse sorrow.
"Do you know that time?Love not is by hand but is diligently daut."
Everyone has his own definition of what is a family. The meaning of a family is different to every one of us. Therefore by sociologists giving definitions to what is a family, we do not have a clear idea of what is family and not all definitions adept to all families. A universal family is a nuclear family. By studying 250 societies, Murdock found a variety of characteristics that these societies have in a family. Some of the characteristics are that the family live in a common residence and have economic co-operation. The family consists of adults of both sexes who are married and maintain a sexual relationship; the adults have biological children or children from adoption, and socializes them. By socializing their children they are transmitting the culture of their generation to their children. As Murdock is a functionalist he regards the family as being a function to society as a whole. According to Murdock the family is a multi-functional institution, which is indispensable for the individual and society.
楼下是典型的psycho，楼主说明100字左右。
绛旓細About 10 years ago, on a beautiful morning full of bright sunlight, I went fishing with my eldder brother.I was so naughty and careless that i slided into the river all of a sudden and luckily was that the water was not very deep and i came out easily,but my cloth was ...
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