请大家帮忙修改一篇英语作文。 诚恳请求大家帮忙修改英语作文
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There is a famous remark said by Abraham Lincoln,"Give me six hours to chop down a tree,and I will spend the the first four sharpeing the axe."Simple it is,what the picture conveys to us is thought-provoking.All of us want to acheive success,but here comes a question, how to do it? The answer is different,Lincoln'words is helpful for us to have a deep thingking.
In china,the students must be studing ten years and we can take part in the final exam in this ten years we can have a good fundation,only in this way can we pass the eaxm.It's impossible for everybody to achieve success in an easier way,we must work harder and harder,improve our ability and skills,then we can beat others in competiton.Why Lincoln spend so many time to sharpeing the axe? Because the clearly dumd know the former preperation is the mostly important.
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1、这是叙述过去的事件，而且有准确的时间，因此全文的基本时态确定为一般过去时。用一般现在时不合适。2、return 是动词，前面已经有了take a bus所以这里连续用动词是错误的，改为back home，这里没必要加our。
3、noodle一般用复数形式，改为noodles。
4、午餐是lunch，dinner改为lunch，和早餐晚餐保持一致。
改后全文：
On Sunday, I usually got up at 7:00. Then I
washed my face and brushed my teeth. After I had breakfast, I went shopping
with my mother. We went to the supermarket by bus. We bought some vegetables
and took a bus back home. We had noodles for lunch. After lunch, I slept
for a little while. Then I did my homework from 14:00 to 17:00. After supper, I
watched TV or read some books. I went to bed at 21:00. It’s my Sunday.
lz你好
After I have breakfast,在这句后面接你下一个活动的时候最好用个then然后
还有那个买蔬菜，那个买是buy，不是by，这两个词同音而已。
吃面条应该用复数noodles
最后一个I watch TV or read some books. or改为and比较合适
最后一句可以改成I have a busy Sunday.
On Sundays,....
We buy some vegetables....
take a bus home ( return home by bus )
We have noodles for our lunch(依后面的时间看，应是午饭)
After lunch,...
After supper,....
最后一句，最好改为That's my Sundays.
have a breakfast
we buy some vegetables and then take the same bus to return our home
we have noodles
I sleep for a while
楼主你都说after dinner了怎么还从下午2点写作业 是lunch吧
After super是啥？supper 是晚宴，比较正式，一般dinner就行
而且我也觉得时态有点问题。不过小学就这样吧。
take a bus return少了一个to； noodles；逻辑错误，dinner是晚餐，这里根据文中意思应用lunch；After super？？；
It's这用的不好，建议用this is；不算你的部分打字错误，语法大错就这么多了，至于特别小的用词差别就不用细究了，估计写这篇文章的朋友应该也弄不懂....
第二行是buy，第三行是noodles，应该别的没什么了，不过你的星期天每次都是这样过吗？用这个时态就表示次次都是这样。
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