帮忙修改一篇英语作文
\u6c42\u5e2e\u5fd9\u4fee\u6539\u4e00\u7bc7\u82f1\u8bed\u4f5c\u6587whenever i am asked\uff0c\u201c what i 'd like to do in my spare time\uff1f\u201di'll not hesitate a moment to say that i love travelling
last year, l had a short visit to Beijing with my family. it was my first time there,so i was curious about this city. I visited the palaces of historical interest.When the Great wall appeared in front of us,we couldn't help thinking how wonderful it is!it is said you can see it from the moon.
i enioyed every minutes of this trip.it was really an unforgettable experience
Many people are interested in computer games, however, some people are addicted to them. If they don't control themselves properly, not only will this waste time, but it is harmful to their eyesight too. It is worth it to think about how to resist the temptation of computer games.
Why do we abandon ourselves in games? In my Opinion, the reason is that we can not cure the temptation in the right way. Consequently, in order to resist this sort of temptation, we should calmly analyse it. Secondly, strengthen our willpower. We can avoild this non-beneficial condition by stopping all contact with bad friends. It is good to resist the temptation to computer games.We should learn how to encourage and supervise ourselves. It is the best way to resist the temptation.
(My personal opinion is that the structure of this essay/paragraph is very messy, i think you should try and tidy it up alittle bit, but you have good vocabulary)
Nowadays, it is more and more difficult to find a job in the cities. College graduates have received advanced education, but they are also worried about their jobs. It is well known that for most people in the world, jobs are necessary in order to survive. Without jobs， they can't support themselves，their families or their college graduates are no exception. There are 1300 million people in China, and it causes difficulty to look jobs directly. The large population leads to a rat race, so it’s difficult to find or fight for a job. Meanwhile, many people are likely to pursue a goal that's too high，especially college graduates. They desire a high salary, good working conditions and so on, but obviously such jobs are limited and it seemed that most people can’t get their wish predestined [pri(:)'destin]. On the other hand, employers select their employees unthinkably strictly。However, they are not necessary to worry about employing nobody.
The large number of laid-off workers have become an important social problem. People need correct ideas of hunting jobs and the government needs to implement ['implimənt] new policies to help the unemployed citizens。 Solving the problem is favorable['feivərəbl] for promoting social development harmoniously[hɑ:'məunjəs]. That's the end of my speech，thank's for your attention！goodbye，everyone！
我打字打的不好，有什么不理解的也可以找我；
我是刚从美国回来的英语教授叫ANGELA，哈佛大学的，有幸能够认识你
同时希望我的特长对你有帮助。
谢谢采纳！
Good afternoon, everyone. I feel very much honored to have a chance to make a speech here. My topic is The Difficulty of Hunting Jobs.
Nowadays, it is more and more difficult to find a job in cities. Even College graduates have received advanced education, they are also worred about their tasks. It is well known that for most human beings in the world, labor is necessary in order to survive. Without it we cannot support ourselves and also our families,so do college graduates.
According to figures,about 1,300 million people in China, and it causes the difficulty of hunting jobs directly. The large number of people leads to a rat race, so it’s hard to find or fight for a job.
Meanwhile, many people are likely to pursue too high a goal especially college graduates. They always desire a high salary, good working conditions and so on, but obviously such works are limited and it seemed that most people can’t get their wish is predestined [pri(:)'destin]. On the other hand, employers select their employees unthinkable strictly, however, they are not necessary to worry about employing nobody.
The large number of laid-off workers has become an important social problem. People need correct ideas of hunting jobs and the government needs to implement ['implimənt] new policies to help the unemployed. Solving the problem is favorable['feivərəbl] for promoting social development harmoniously[hɑ:'məunjəs].
Good afternoon, everyone. It is my honor to have a chance to make a speech here. My topic is The Difficulty of Hunting Jobs.
Nowadays, it is more and more difficult to find a job in cities. College graduates have received advanced education, but they still worry about their jobs. It is well known that for most people in the world, work is necessary in order to survive. Without job they cannot support themselves and their families, the college graduates are no exception. There are 1300 million people in China, and it causes the difficulty of hunting jobs directly. The large number of people leads to a rat race, so it’s difficult to find or fight for a job. Meanwhile, many people are likely to pursue the goal too high, especially college graduates. They desire high salary, good working conditions and so on, obviously, such works are limited. In fact, most people can not get their wish coming true. On the other hand, employers select their employees unthinkable strictly, since they needn’t to worry about nobody engaging.
The large number of laid-off workers has become a serious social problem. People need to correct their ideas of hunting jobs and the government also needs to implement ['implimənt] new policies to help the unemployed. Solving the problem is favorable ['feivərəbl] for promoting social development harmoniously [hɑ:'məunjəs].
1.I feel very much honored to have a chance to make a speech here.
very much 改为really
2.Nowadays, it is more and more difficult to find a job in cities.
difficult 后加for college graduates
3.but they are also worry about their jobs.
worry改为worried
4.It is well known that for most people in the world, work is necessary in order to survive.
改为As we all know,work is relly necessary for a person to survive.
5.Without work they cannot support themselves and their families and college graduates are no exception
改为Without work college graduates will not be able to support themselves and their families . they will have no exception.
6.but obviously such works are limited and it seemed that most people can’t get their wish is predestined
改为but obviously， such works are limited and it seems that most people can’t get them.Their wish is predestined
7.There are 1300 million people in China,
1300 million 改为1.3billion
8.pursue too high a goal 改为 pursue a high goal
they are not necessary to worry about employing nobody
改为 they aren't afraid that there is no employees at all.
9.government needs to implement ['implimənt] new policies to
help the unemployed.
help the unemployed改为help the persons who are unemployed
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