找到一次语法错误加10分.
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This is to certify that ABC is a junior majoring in Accounting of our school.
2. Our school has vocation from \u2026\u2026 \u5b66\u6821\u653e\u5047\u8fd8\u662f\u7528 Our school vocation is from \u2026\u2026\u6bd4\u8f83\u597d\uff0c\u66f4\u7b26\u5408\u4e60\u60ef
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Somebody asker me why I want to write this story unexpectedly.
\u6539\u4e3a\uff1aSomebody asked me why I wanted to write this story unexpectedly.\uff08\u8fd9\u4e2aunexpectedly\u5f88\u602a\uff09
Now, I give every audience a official answer. I eat too much but have nothing to do. Is everybody satisfied with answer?
\u6539\u4e3a\uff1aNow, I would like to give every audience an official answer: I eat too much but have nothing to do.\uff08\u5403\u9971\u4e86\u6491\u7684\uff0c\u55ef\uff0c\u7ed9\u4e2d\u56fd\u4eba\u770b\u662f\u53ef\u4ee5\u7684\uff09Is everybody satisfied?
First, let me give a short introduction about our organize.
\u6539\u4e3a\uff1aLet me start with a brief introduction about our organization.
Alone, just me.
\u6ca1\u770b\u660e\u767d\u8fd9\u53e5\u4ec0\u4e48\u610f\u601d
The head of the league.
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Every Tuesday I preside over the regular meeting in a gambling house besides the Wumei Supermarket.
besides\u6539\u4e3abeside
Peter. A man who is never in his right mind.
That\u2019s so called insanity. He has lots names as many as the counts of sexmates which the NBA superstar ---- Wilt-Chamberlain had. You can call him LiLei, HanMeimei, Jim, Lucy, Lily, Ann or any name you like.
\u6539\u4e3a\uff1aPeter, a man who is always out of his mind, which is what is called being in state of insanity, has lots of names, as many as the NBA superstar, Wilt Chamberlain's lovers, namely LiLei, HanMeimei, Jim, Lucy, Lily, Ann, or whatever you like.
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这种口语上的句子最好在essay中不要出现。
在使用conjunctions时，中国人很容易犯错。所以在写文章时一定要注意。你文章中用了很多，这些逻辑关系一定要清晰。
Currently
Generally speaking
On the contrary
Understandably
As a result
In a word
However
很难说你错或者不错，你大致是在国外学习吧,老师一定教过你什么是fanboys了。
For
And
Nor
But
Or
Yet
So
尽量使用这些简单的，并且把简单句子合成复杂的或着通过添加形容词。这样英文进步快，也容易拿高分。
倒数第二行的最后,是if you are without self-confidence.其实直接说however,without self-confidence,you will..我觉得比较好,不显得累赘.
最后一行and failure will always be on your mind.
多口说句,第一句,无关语法问题.你要表达的是好的个性在现今是很必要的是吗?the order of the day让人有点不理解.说Good personalities are quite necessary nowadays.
第二行 maybe改为may be
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